NewStats: 3,261,335 , 8,173,706 topics. Date: Wednesday, 28 May 2025 at 08:49 PM f5o2f

stephenGee12:
Wow nice one man. Keep it up. But u need to work on ur quotations. So we can knw who is talking.


Keep it up bro. We gat ur back

thanks bro will work on it.

hmmmmm some people will just be finding for trouble
not bin in d mood to read all dis while Daz y it seems like am not online n now I kn av got alot of catching up to do

princ007 happy birthday in arrears Llnp

alamiendagash am kinda confuse o it is one of d twin dat kill d parent Abi uncle?cos Iyam not understanding

Akinwale14:
Thanks bro for the invitation,, I'm here now so lets enjoy the story together

Yes oh
Let EmpressT serve us some JUICE

herosakin777:
thanks sir am here now

Welcome bro. What would you like to take?

AlamienDagash:
hadampson princ007 deji124 souloho19 update don land

I don come as e dey hot oh

hormobolanle:
hmmmmm some people will just be finding for trouble
not bin in d mood to read all dis while Daz y it seems like am not online n now I kn av got alot of catching up to do

princ007 happy birthday in arrears Llnp

alamiendagash am kinda confuse o it is one of d twin dat kill d parent Abi uncle?cos Iyam not understanding

hormobolanle:
hmmmmm some people will just be finding for trouble
not bin in d mood to read all dis while Daz y it seems like am not online n now I kn av got alot of catching up to do

princ007 happy birthday in arrears Llnp

alamiendagash am kinda confuse o it is one of d twin dat kill d parent Abi uncle?cos Iyam not understanding

Na dem uncle
Buh the uncle lied and tell hasan that his bro killed em parents and run away and said same to husayn

Thanks for the mention. Well done, following.

AlamienDagash:
lemme call the people which without them literature would've been a dull and pale place to visit
they are one big family
modified: we are one big family!

Hadampson my boss
Stephengee12 my bro
fmartin my dude


my role models
Ghostwritter
lesky3
souloho19
Kimberlywest
Larrysun
kimkardashian


rest of the family

rachealfst
pamelib
SurestG
marianneada
bibi294
yewandequeen
TiffanyJ
Toyin223
Evajeal
shewrites
Queenitee
kerenjay
Adesina12
Yhungbrowhne
Xaviercasmir
uminem02
Theblessedman
Gtin
chizzymaris
Davidhero

Thanks dear.
Hadampson, any refreshments?

Part Three


Hasan has already loathe his bro acutely, he was in his new bedroom entrusted to him by his uncle, nuhuh tries his best to exhilarates him, but the more he try the more hasan became morose.
HUSAYN
Its been a month now, Husayn has suffered a lot, he'd encounters with many ordeal, he is livid with life, he is no longer ecstatic, to cover up, he took an oath upon himself that he'll always be staunched and honest, maybe God will consider him and forgive his brother, he has berserk a lot now is time to desists it, he had to let the past be.

“he is so pang as he lurched into the market, everything now seem to exist multiple, “ your brother killed your parents, it was by accident, you got to run, run! This echoed to him and he faint.
Husayn opened his eyes slowly as snail walk, he was at someone's home, two people are looking at him, he shook his head to see clearly but immediately he feels a severe pain in his head, he feel a bandage wrapped round his head. “easy you don't need to worry said a feminine voice he rubs his eyes and could see a woman and beside her was a man looking sympathetic. He sighed a heavy relief and closed his eyes.

****** ****** ******

Husayn was in uncle John trade shop,regularly husayn and John would went to the market in the morning and came back at noon, husayn was always ambidextrous, he dare not to be dire in working cuz he don't want to be a nuisance to his saviour.
Husayn was resting in the shop, at the context some lousy men barged in whistling, he wishes no strife will arise but he was left stunned and perplexed over what his bare eyes witnesses.

Thanks for reading.

Hadampson:
Yes oh Let EmpressT serve us some JUICE

Lolzz OK no p

AlamienDagash I must confess this story is wonderful and interesting,,,more update pls

Hmm...this uncle must be uncle scar..nice one bro. I'm following

Akinwale14:
AlamienDagash I must confess this story is wonderful and interesting,,,more update pls

thanks mehn

Following bumper to bumper... But can u please break down some of u grammar ehn. I dnt have to read dis wit a dictionary na(smile). Nice story u gat here

Thank God for husyne's life. Well great story line. But some places u used past tense instead of present continuous tense.

I like what I had read but pls improve on ur tenses, your conversational quotes, ur suspence, reduce the unecessary vocabularies and most of all make ur story captivating with every post. Readers get bored if stories lack all the above...I dey ur back.

Hmmmm Nice one tho

ChizzyMaris:
Thanks dear. Hadampson, any refreshments?

Ogogoro dey. Shey make i bring am?

AlamienDagash:
Be aware...
no part of this story should be copied or reproduced in any form without the author's permission. allright reserved Alameen Dagash 2017.

as an amateur writer sensible criticism is highly welcomed here.

this is a pure fiction story inspired by myself.

I don arrive!!...thanks 4 d mention

Hadampson:
Ogogoro dey. Shey make i bring am?

No o, make I dey sip my sachet water..

adontcare:
Thank God for husyne's life. Well great story line. But some places u used past tense instead of present continuous tense.

thanks a lot
I'll work on it.

Blecool:
Following bumper to bumper... But can u please break down some of u grammar ehn. I dnt have to read dis wit a dictionary na(smile). Nice story u gat here

thanks dear
I appreciate but please stop flattering me

ghostwritter:
I like what I had read but pls improve on ur tenses, your conversational quotes, ur suspence, reduce the unecessary vocabularies and most of all make ur story captivating with every post. Readers get bored if stories lack all the above...I dey ur back.

OK Boss
I really appreciate your
thanks a lot
I'll try harder

I have arrived.
Hadampson, shift yourself go one corner, make I see road well.
Lemme go and start reading.

AlamienDagash:
lemme call the people which without them literature would've been a dull and pale place to visit
they are one big family
modified: we are one big family!

Hadampson my boss
Stephengee12 my bro
fmartin my dude


my role models
Ghostwritter
lesky3
souloho19
Kimberlywest
Larrysun
kimkardashian


rest of the family

rachealfst
pamelib
SurestG
marianneada
bibi294
yewandequeen
TiffanyJ
Toyin223
Evajeal
shewrites
Queenitee
kerenjay
Adesina12
Yhungbrowhne
Xaviercasmir
uminem02
Theblessedman
Gtin
chizzymaris
Davidhero

thanks BRo
m grateful for this

I think this story will be interesting.
But the narration is a bit scattered and I don't seem to understand what's going on exactly.
So like ghostwritter said, "I like what I had read but pls improve on ur tenses, your conversational quotes, ur suspence, reduce the unecessary vocabularies and most of all make ur story captivating with every post. Readers get bored if stories lack all the above".
But most important is the tenses and quotes, that would make it easier and less stressful to read.

Ride on.