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emaculate99: 11:51am On Dec 30, 2015 |
Abomination! Abomination! The wails of the unborn babies heard, Their future mother a cause of tears, My village, now immorality dent, Palm oil, my white now stained. Gone to the earth like the dead Abacha, Through the thin air unspoken, Days when dogs barked at nudity, And madness its mother's name, Now this, the world embrace, My head dodges as madness flies. Abomination! This must cease to continue, The gods need to be appeased, For ye, the holy temple disesteemed, The price to appease the gods, Must thine behold. "One Python's eggs, Two lions' teeth, Three leopard's heart, Four fat cows, Five live lionesses, Six live anaconda, And seven Pacific cowries- The sacrifice must be complete!" The chief priest has spoken, So, let the madness stop, But can this be stopped? ©Emaculate Ife 2015 17 Likes 5 Shares |
emaculate99: 11:53am On Dec 30, 2015 |
cowleg:Thanks for this. |
JigsawKillah(m): 5:36pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
emaculate99: Cowleg na character sha |
llaykorn: 7:00pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
LMAO. How do you write your funny poems, emmaculate99? Cc: lalasticlala |
emaculate99: 8:01pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
llaykorn:I guess it's inspirational....#winks |
saint047(m): 8:46pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
Nice one to end the year 2015
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Davidson267(m): 8:52pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
Hmmmm
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timothyuche1(m): 8:53pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
I like this
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desmondDessi(m): 8:57pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
![]() My head dodges as madness flies. NiceOne 1 Like |
morganacanta: 8:59pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
emaculate99:A heartfelt advice for the poet ...lay off writing poetry .Even my six year old niece can do better and she just learnt ABC. 1 Like 1 Share |
FRESHp345(m): 8:59pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
I do not get the msg plz. can you elabotate
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sinaj(f): 9:00pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
Woooow! It's very nice ![]() I love this ![]() ![]() Lol at cowleg |
llaykorn: 9:01pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta: Write yours and let's see what you can do. If you don't, should we call you a bastard? ![]() 5 Likes 1 Share |
E383: 9:11pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta: Its so easy to be critical of other people's attempts when we can't even put up a better showing if given an opportunity. Your bad mouth will get you nowhere. llaykorn: It can be very difficult to come up with inspiration for a poem, especially since my inspirations come with emotions embedded in each word, phrase or sentence. I have been struggling since after the competition to write a line. Good job Emma. 2 Likes 2 Shares |
GreatManBee: 9:13pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
Keep it up. emaculate99: 1 Like |
llaykorn: 9:14pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
E383: Yes, brother, I agree with you. The same thing happened to me a few months back. I didn't write a line for about 50 days. ![]() 2 Likes 1 Share |
youngwarlocks: 9:15pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
ok
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Enesi13: 9:19pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
it is a nice one, it potrays moral decadence in women who are sopos to be role model, an epitome of modesty for dr future baby. Bt deir deeds is so terrifying dat we need reorientation, if not rehabilitation for some as it is madness
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Enesi13: 9:24pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
dos criticising dis work shld give me a brk, who says a poem cant b simply and comic, anyway dis is his styl, no much big words, and d mood is awesome. His styl is wonderful...poem is not a one way tin so dnt expect his words to luk like wole soyinka. Its cool.
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Enesi13: 9:24pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
dos criticising dis work shld give me a brk, who says a poem cant b simple and comic, anyway dis is his styl, no much big words, and d mood is awesome. His styl is wonderful...poem is not a one way tin so dnt expect his words to luk like wole soyinka. Its cool.
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superior1: 9:25pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
Nice one. Want to ask though, is the world no longer interested in seeing rhymes in poems, cant find any here?
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Olasco93: 9:30pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
emaculate99:As long as the gods who cannot (Talk, Move, Protect and Defend itself) with the Chief Priest are enjoying those sacrifices above continually, it must be really hard for the madness of the gods and that of the Chief Priest to stop in the nearest future... Nice Poem! 1 Like |
emaculate99: 9:37pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
superior1:The world is still interested in rhyme but it is not compulsory in poetry. |
joseph1832(m): 9:38pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta:Kindly show us what you and your six year old cousin can do? And since you know so much about poetry, what type of poem is it and what's the structure of the poem? Kindly provide answers or refrain from commenting. Thanks. 3 Likes |
joseph1832(m): 9:41pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta:You ed today and you're already showing your 'ingenuity' when it comes to poetry. Bloody marvelous. |
emaculate99: 9:41pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta:Thanks for the criticism. It would have been better if you had posted a poem of yours. Being comic or senseless to you doesn't mean it is bad but I will work on your criticism. |
mobi5592: 9:45pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
"days when dogs bark at unclothedness"...that actually got me thinking...i guess the dogs themselves have been over feed. iranu |
E383: 9:49pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
morganacanta: Maybe! But the OP actually writes well. Maybe not this time. Please be careful in your use of vilifying words, such usually cause more harm than good. Your kind words and encouragement may just be all the OP needs to get better. Have a good evening. 1 Like 2 Shares |
OMA4U(m): 9:57pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
llaykorn:No no no! Laykorn, don't tread that lane! Keep up the good work. Adey feel you. *wink* |
llaykorn: 10:04pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
OMA4U: Sincerely, I didn't wish to. It's just amazing how one that has no knowledge of something can be so bold to tell someone else his 6 year old brother would write a better poem. Because he finds the poem funny? Because it made no sense to him? Hear those, brother! What good work, sir? ![]() |
Qaisar1: 10:21pm On Dec 30, 2015 |
nice Poem ... "...Days when dogs barked at Unclothedness..." I think these days, they cherish the sight. |